Check-In, Day 11

[mistressofmuses]

We're sliding down the second half of the week! Hopefully it's been going well so far.

Poll #33945

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Where are you in working on your WIP at the moment?

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Working on pre-writing: research, planning, outlining, etc.!
1 (14.3%)

Writing!
2 (28.6%)

Editing!
1 (14.3%)

Working on something other than my intended WIP!
1 (14.3%)

Not working on anything/taking a break!
2 (28.6%)

Something else!
0 (0.0%)

Comments

[igenlode]

I sat down to do a couple of sentences on typing-up Chapter 2 in the small hours, just before going to bed, and found myself pushing through to the end of the chapter because I kept wanting to continue for 'just one more sentence'. Which is probably a good sign in terms of reader appeal, if not for my sleeping schedule....

And I managed to get my chorus in triple-time to come out; not so close a translation in terms of exact words as I should have liked, but the story is there.

No sword -- a bullet, that's the thing! For what a gap three steps can bring...
And so that bullet/never reached him/as intended.
Indeed, that distance now was seen -- a body flung itself between...
It was the boy's life/in that moment/that was ended.

(No sword! A bullet, that was it! Three steps -- that is also a long way.
And -- the bullet never reached its meeting with the captain.
Yes, that was it -- three steps -- a long way! Some-one's breast gave him cover...
That was how we lost the cabin-boy in that combat.)

I have spent most of the next day stuck at the stage of revolving around segments of potential translation that might fit the metre while trying to think of rhymes that might fit into them (the following verse contains a list, which is terrible for translation because it offers no flexibility at all in terms of content). So I have lots of possible snippets but no lines at all as yet.

[mistressofmuses]

It's exciting when your own work makes you want to keep going! (Even if it's less exciting for your sleep schedule, ha.)

Nicely done on the chorus!